“Mountains” progresses well. Originally a single-stanza sketch, there is now a second stanza (as is sometimes the case, the consequence of exploring different line ideas). There are also, throughout the draft, several clusters of alliteration I am eager to explore. How happy I am I did not discard the poem!
Thoughts
I am developing the simplest idea for the second stanza of “Rains and Roads”: since the first delights at the sun breaking through the clouds, the second watches as it retreats. The subject having shifted to the sun (rather than the effects of the rain, as in the original sketch), the working title too has evolved; it is currently, “The Sun Through the Clouds”.
Timorously developing the rough lines of the “Rains and Roads” poetic sketch, here and there, a promising phrase emerges—like the very sunlight through clouds they describe. The poem muses upon a moment not unlike the one I include here, photographed in late spring, 2018. (So bright was the sun that the iPhone camera could not bear it!) I suspect “Rains and Roads” will be a single stanza to echo the transience of the scene. Indeed, nothing worthy comes to mind for a second stanza just yet.
Forgotten Fields 