Sometimes, a stanza is instantly improved by simply moving things around. Swop these two words or those two lines and voilà, a better verse!
creative process
“Mountains” progresses well. Originally a single-stanza sketch, there is now a second stanza (as is sometimes the case, the consequence of exploring different line ideas). There are also, throughout the draft, several clusters of alliteration I am eager to explore. How happy I am I did not discard the poem!
From “Rains and Roads” to “Mountains”
The second stanza for “The Sun Through the Clouds” (previously, “Rains and Roads”) has been a success. Not only does it mirror the structure of the first stanza, it complements its concept in a manner I had not anticipated when I first conceived of it. The poem then is complete; its final title, “A Sunburst!”.
In the coming days, I shall reflect upon its lines to see if they may be further refined, but I am confident that it is now in its final form. In the meantime, I have officially abandoned the “Cranes” and “Autumn Day” sketches, as my criticisms remain, but I would like to make an attempt at developing “Mountains”.
Forgotten Fields 